Originally Posted by Rob B.
Originally Posted by Fdemetrio
Knew he couldnt contain himself.

Were you asking for feedback or why did you post your lyric here? If you don't want anybody to respond, don't post in the first place.
Yeah, twice in the chorus - but the whole thing is still the same idea over and over. If that’s all you took from the critique, you kinda proved my point. You call this interesting? Yeah, it really looks like it was written in two minutes. That explains all the typos.
No, I was posting it there cause that's where lurkers lurk

Rob you cant attempt to criticize anybody writing you are atrociously bad.

You wanted to mix it up that's what happejs