Originally Posted by JAPOV
Just remember Jesus
Take a moment of time
Consider God's point of view
Calm and clear your mind
Strife is temporary
Heaven is eternity
An everlasting promise
A peace transcending
Life's missing piece...


Really like these lines a lot, JAPOV but they don’t really carry the point...I’m just bringing up something that the person may have given no thought to whatsoever...and IMO that wouldn’t be the time to talk about God’s point of view/eternity/everlasting promise...they may have tried to solve their problems other ways and all I am saying is..you know, you might want to consider Jesus which could then lead nicely into your lyric...really appreciate what you have here...actually there's a really interesting song that could come out of what you have here

Steve

Creators of music have a responsibility to their craft. When they have finished using all the notes and words, they must pass them down to the next generation with a simple request. “Use these to create new music.”...Steven McDonald