Originally Posted by Fdemetrio
I agree great hook, on paper, I had the same problem on a song called shes a jeanious, listener can't see that, I changed it, you'll hear it eventually...

Back to this, it's a great hook, I LOVE the verses, I honestly don't think the chorus works, it comes off musically as a joke type of statement, based off n that Calypso hook. That might work with a different lyric.

But the verses are great, sounds like Genesis...the band, not the book

But this is totally worth rehauling, perhaps couch's 'advice can help too

I'd stay with the verses style all the way through, you don't wanna be changing genres

Of course all subjective here.

Who is performing this?


Fd, thanks for the listen and comment...I get where you’re coming from on the chorus and some may see it that way “a joke type of statement, based off n that Calypso hook.” I’m inclined to not change the feel as is but will work on other possibilities that keep it in sync with the verses....

In keeping with CG’s comment, it is a simple fix and am giving some thought

If you mean who is singing....that’s me with Jon doing harmony

Creators of music have a responsibility to their craft. When they have finished using all the notes and words, they must pass them down to the next generation with a simple request. “Use these to create new music.”...Steven McDonald