Good evening everyone! cool

I wrote this song in late July/early August and have been periodically working on it since. When this song came to me, I had already solidified the list of songs I wanted to use for my next music project, but after playing around with this tune, I really want to include it! I think it's one of the most beautiful songs I've written in a while.

I was inspired to write this when I took a water rafting trip during a visit with my friend. Floating down the river, I was so relaxed and began to think about people and whether it's possible to really know somebody. And my conclusion is no, you can't. There are always hidden depths to people that you may never get to see, no matter how long you know them.

Now this is something that I'm looking at for myself to sing, and my arrangement so far (it isn't finished yet) is very synthy/Moby-like, in the vein of this song:

Moby - Porcelain

What I'm looking for is feedback on whether the song sounds good as a whole, do I need to add or take away anything, etc. I'm working on an electronic arrangement, so I want to make sure the song is all good before I keep going. smile

All right, enough talking grin Here's my song with lyrics right after the link. I know parts of this are a bit rough but I did it as a demo. smile

Rivers (demo)

Rivers

(c) 2013 by Cecilee Linke

Cutting through mountains
And bleeding its waters
Hiding in the sunshine
Of a lush forest

There are flooded banks
From a distant storm
And scarred rocks
In the rapids

Here, in this solitude

There are rivers
You will never see
Behind these eyes
Behind this smile
There are rivers
You will never see
Even if you try
There are too many miles
To ever see it all
There are rivers rivers rivers
That you will never see

And in this quiet chaos
The current rushes on
Bubbling in the moonlight
Under the howling wind

The world only sees
The calm and the glow
So no one else knows
The soul beneath the light

Bridge:
And the closer you are
The farther away you go

'Cause there are

Rivers
You will never see
Behind these eyes
Behind this smile
There are rivers
You will never see
Even if you try
There are too many miles
To ever see it all
There are rivers rivers rivers
That you will never see

Rivers rivers rivers
Rivers rivers rivers
That you, my dear
Will never
See

(c) 2013 by Cecilee Linke

Thank you very much in advance for taking the time to listen and critique my song, I really really appreciate it. smile