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Kay Lynn,
Real catchy melody. In V1, have you considered ending L1 with something like "love appears"?
I also don't see any need for a second chorus. Maybe you can just consider that (in some form) for your bridge, with a different melody, unless you'd rather the bridge go in another direction.
Good luck with it. I know rewriting is no fun.
Bill
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We too often throw around the word "great" like it was a frisbee, instead of the manhole cover it should be.
[This message has been edited by lijemtu (edited 12-30-2003).]
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