I noticed the other comments on this thread and went back to listen again. I agree that there is not much wrong with what you have done.

A couple of things that stood out though....the sibilance on the vocal and the lack of bass. Your vocal has a lot of hissing and spitting(!) going on. You should either use a de-esser to control it or use less compression which emphasizes it (or carve out the hisses from the track). Also the song is crying out for a bass guitar to come in at some point after the beginning, and possibly some big sounding drums (toms) to complete it.

But overall, it sounds pretty good.

Colin

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