Tarantino uses film, and a lot of props. Maybe if you added props to the first verse somehow to set up either his anticipation of the meeting or have it state that it's online somehow that might clear it up. BUT! I have been known to be wrong so I would definate wait for more feedback. Don't ever just rely on my opinion (I.e. not expert advice) to make a lyric better. I'm not ashamed to admit I know less today than I did last year....

Last edited by Caroline; 06/14/12 06:49 PM.

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