Personally, I don't like to give to much detail in a critique. What qualifications do I have? Have I written a couple of hits?To assume you know more than the person who wrote the song is arrogant. I don't like Jerusalem artichokes so how can I criticise someone who does. They obviously taste different to them.
The term "In my opinion" is the best way to start or finish a critique. ie. "In my opinion the song has a good start and middle but lacks an ending" or "In my opinion the chorus doesn't reflect the meaning of the song".
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