Nice demo, fitting music. I would like to see more images in the verses, it's OK for a chorus to be a bit general.

Lines below in bold need more images, IMO:

When I stand still and clear my mind
I think about how long I have, and precious time
I landed in the right place, and yet somehow
I wish I knew then, what I think I know now

Chorus
Time is like a train
Without a slight hesitation
Time is like a train
To an unknown destination
On a one way track
There’s no going back (going back)
When time’s like a train

Musical Break

I’ve seen how life can change with one goodbye
And caused bitter tears to fall from angelic eyes
I’ve ridden high enough to kick around the clouds
Then in a turn, felt buried ,knee deep in the ground



Bridge
Now that silver threads run through my hair
I remember the rocky roads that put 'um there,
I can't change a single thing thats said and done,
but I can be a better man til I see that setting sun?




“I usually start with a title or maybe a little rhyme or phrase.” - Harlan Howard

Co-writing = Compromise!