Hi Kevin, thanks for the comments.
Kim and I did discuss shortening at least the first chorus,so you may have something there. The "without a slight hesitation" part could be replaced with Beth's suggestion "passing by me at the station". I'll check what Kim thinks. She's in charge there, lol.
I can't do anything about the voice. That's the way I sing.
It's like a cross between Cash, Waylon and Julie Andrews. :-)
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