Marc, while I don't want to hijack this thread (sorry, Dan, I'm sometimes guilty of that!) it goes back to what you said about SAYING IT DIFFERENTLY! While the first two verses are not much different than I'm sure, anything you've heard, the rest of the song is:

"Tonight I'm gonna ride...tonight I'm gonna riiiiiiide...STEP TO THE SIDE"

"I prayed until my knees were bruised, should I stay or should I go, I tried to think of FOUR GOOD REASONS....AND I COULDN'T EVEN THINK OF ONE...leaving you is what I choose"

"Gonna find reasons to smile...gonna find a way to LOVE ME again..."

"Step to the side GET OUTTA MY WAY...best not try to stop me....I've a lifetime of catching up to do"

I hear original lines and a great hook in this song. I also hear it done a little faster, with a full band, a pissed off Martina McBride type vocal, and a great guitar lead after the bridge.

To tell you the truth, I can't sing the song without crying (gotta work on that). You're right, the audience will melt. But I also believe that a full blown demo with a band would really kick this song into gear and make it viable. It's NOT your average angry chick song...it's all about empowerment, and it could apply to anyone in a bad situation who finally stands up and says, "I'm not afraid of you anymore! So you're gonna kill me? It can't be any worse than what life is right now!"

I talked with Glyn, and I might change a few words and a few notes singing wise, again, vamp up the music, who knows? What's the worst that can happen? I got to do my interpretation of a song that moves me, and some folks in Cincinnati get to hear it. What's the best that can happen? We put it on ITunes and it sells like wildfire, and the Youtube video gets 2,000,000 hits! smile

Magne says there's a certain formula for "pro" songs. Well, there is and there isn't. How else would something as Godawful as "Billy, Don't Be a Hero" ever get played so much on the radio? Then there's R.E.M.s "Everybody Hurts" (which by Marc's standards wouldn't make it...too much of a downer) which is a really great song and a huge hit, and yeah, it's a BIG TIME downer! Just sayin'... smile

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