While I like the song and production I'll keep this short and sweet, Like the song should be.
It is too wordy, too long, and gets monotonous, IMHO. By the third verse I was tuning out. Literally.
I'd rewrite verse one and two into one verse.
I might also drop the first two lines out of the chorus and perhaps use it in a bridge
[/b]I know it(They) ain’t perfect but they're a one of a kind
A little rough around the edges but still in its prime[b]


Last edited by Bill Robinson; 04/15/10 04:11 PM.
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