Howdy Paul!

Welcome to JPF. Good to have with us!

My wife is from your part of the world. She's from Bakersfield.

If you're new to songwriting, you're leaps and bounds ahead of most newbies! This is very good. You stay focused on your hook and write intersting descriptions. Your word choices work well and are very descriptive. That's a great start any way you look at it!

So, that noise was a broken string! I'm a lead guitarist by trade...been there, done that!

Sounds good. Good luck with the songs in your future.

Alan