Hey Paul....if you are a new writer, you are well on your way IMHO....that is a great little country/rocker. Has a great melody and groove, nice vocs as well.

If was to go over the lyric with a fine tooth comb, I could probably come up with a few little changes....but darned if you haven't just about nailed it right out of the gate...great to meet you...now let's hear some more.

Hey, the busted string....nice touch! Oh...that was real?? Well, whatever....cracked me up.

Way to carry a theme out all the way to the end....I loved it.

Jan (nice to meet ya') I am a country writer as well.