Caroline,

I am liking where you're trying to go with this one, for the most part....but, I am confused. In v.1 you have him in the shower and saying that he hasn't seen much of her in a week, then he gets out of the shower and finds that she's been in there writing in the steam in the mirror.

Then he goes out to the truck and finds another note from her to meet her in their special place....then in the bridge he is walking in the front door of the very house they he came out of and finds his surprise. Am I missing something vital here...could me all me.....

I would change the end of the line that tells about the note in the truck and use TOUCH or MUCH or something else there....the way you have it sounds a bit YODA. Gosh, I think this is almost there....but needs to be clearer and a few tweaks on some lines, but I really love the hook and the way that you are trying to develop it, but it needs to be crystal clear...not cloudy like steam....but I do love a one word hook/title....when it really works. Don't give up on this one....it could be great with just a little more clarity.

Toby Keith.....or Trace....yup...I agree.

Jan

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