Originally Posted by Wendy D
I liked the music to this and the vocal delivery is good. The lyric holds together for me nicely. The only thought I have is the last two lines of the bridge "At least I never, ever said that I was wrong." I suppose this is meant to convey that in lieu of saying he was wrong, the singer gave up having a relationship with this person. If that's what it means, I think that part of the lyric that needs to be a bit stronger.

I think maybe some tweaks to the lyric with a few more unique images might be in order too. I say this because I'm not sure I will remember much about this one when the music stops. It did not pull me in and resonate with me. If this were mine, I guess I would sketch out the relationship a bit and decide some things about my characters, then I would add those details back to the lyric. Overall however, I thought this was a nice, honest song. Very easy on the ears and pleasant to listen to.


Wendy:

Thanks for your kind comments.

You got it right about the end of the bridge. In the bridge, I was trying to reveal his true feelings and give the reason for the breakup. I realize now the end of the bridge was poorly done (and will be reworked.) Thanks for weighing in on that one.

Ah, images. I love them. They do pull you into a song and give you a connection with the character or situation. They probably also help the song to stay with you after the song finishes. My image creating muscles are still pretty weak...but I'm working on them.

Thanks for the insightful comments.

Mark

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