It is ALWAYS, a pleasure reading and learning from this thread!
It is finally good to hear something about what works great in a song. I totally agree with the the points about things being 'Commercial' or not 'Commercial' I knew that would not be a factor when Harriet would critique the song.

Where does craft factor in when writing this type of song?
I'm not being cynical or anything like that, I just don't have enough experience to tell where.

Maybe because this style is not a strong-point for me, it sounds a little dated to me, or not current.
But I know that can get in the way of judging the integrity of the song itself.

It really is hard looking at a song and trying not to judge it by what you think works in the market and this is a good reminder of that. If the success of a song is successful in getting the feeling and intent across, then this surely is successful in doing that.


Saying that, I can't help but want to know what can be improved upon in this? Maybe story-wise/Details of why the singer feels this way? Again with this type of song there is a lot of room for leaving all that out, but I'm still feeling I want to know more.

I felt that the second verse was a continuation of the first, so I have the feeling hearing what I have already heard, and feeling
like there should be more of a development or something, maybe that's because I am reading the lyrics at the same time, and most people that listen and relate to it won't be?

Anyway, this is a great learning tool! Thanks Harriet,so glad you are still with us!!!-Dana