YAY, T.G.,

Glad you were moved to join the party!!

And I'm SO HAPPY you could crank out something so uplifting -- NOT! grin

Seriously, though, this is good writing Derek...you really have made a lot of headway since our newbie days (sniffle, sniffle).

First off, great opener....gets us right into the thick of things....

Then the lift...another cool combo...Second line in particular is terrific:

Think it’s time to put you on the shelf

Then, I know this is probably a dumb question (I missed the whole thing on Steve's "Margaret Dances" frown )....but just what is she asking him to do? Are you being purposely innocuous? :o AAARGH, right from my fellow-song-challenger....gadzooks!

Well, anyhoo, it sounds like she's an ungrateful Witch, and he should dump her pronto.

BTW, on the bridge...to tighten it up a bit, might you want to say:

Bridge
The evidence is clear as you stand accused
This ole broken heart’s tired of BEING USED

I think that might be a rhyming no-no, since used is part of accused, but all's fair in love and song challenges!!

Thanks so much for playing Derek...and hopefully there'll be plent of songs for you to comment on....

Ciao for now,
Betharoo



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