Very good idea for the song - and the idea is very effectively unfolded. The quite simplicity is good in conjunction with the lyrics.

Some things to consider changing ---

in a hearbeat... - phrasing does not work-

on the freeway - not as stong and slight phrasing issue -

better simple life - not as strong in terms of lyrics

Tom




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