Interesting take on breaking up, Wendy. Some good lines. I think it could be made more commercial with some slight tweaking. My favorite part.

Out here in my chrome pony
Galloping at full speed
It's not want you wanted
But it is what I need
We're past all redeeming
Past the point of peace
And out here on this highway
I'm driving to my sweet release

"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek