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HiDee Mz Gem!
I'd vote for "Glistening" Wings. Internal Rhyme/Better Imagery.
Why? Waal..IF ya extrapolate "Powdered" to "Lady" whatdya get? "Made-UP"--
AND the Overall Analogy is this is An Emergent GAL.
"Glistening" hints they're Not Completely Dry yet..also has that Jewel-Lke Quality to it. Hints at Best is Yet to Come, too!
I didn't know Butterflies ALL came from Chrysalises...something rings un-true to that...but I'd have to Read Further/no time today!
Suggest "CECROPIA" (It's a Gorgeous Moth) instead of "LUNA"---(Means MOON..& comes kinda Close to "Loony" when-sung.) Sounds Poetic-Enuf for Brother Ben...Insect-Lovers'll go for it...& yeah, many WILL have to Look It Up Later..but what the Heck, SOUNDS like Something Beautiful!
Suggest "Life can be tough/On A lonely girl"...(Insteada "this"...makes the lyric More-inclusive & "Universal")
LOVED the "Shades of blue love" Line...it's worthy of a Whole Song, IMO~
Chorus feels "Short"...(Since the Verses Are, too.) Somehow Doubling it might Double Our Pleasure... Just a Thought!
All Sugs are K-O-S...& Good Luck with this Song that's Growing Wings!
Big Hugs, Stan
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