Hi Ms. Joice Marie,

I was also having a hard time visualizing powdery wings. Think Pete has a great idea with the "silky" suggestion.

And, like Pete, I've always loved the cocoon and butterfly metaphore. Long time ago someone told me my name meant butterfly. Well, I'm gonna claim that promise as I keep spinnin away!

Blue love had me a little confused. I guess I've never thought of love as blue before. Maybe it's me though.


"Been spending my days
SPINNING MY Wheels
Searching my soul
For a better DEAL"

Forgive me for messing with the verse above. It seemed to be stated backwards from what I'd expect. Again, it may just be me. I'm not suggesting at all that my line fixes anything cuz it ruins your rhyme. Just trying to show how the arrangement of thought process might flow differently there.

Love the hope and faith expressed in the chorus. Might consider making it a bit more hopeful and determined by replacing "maybe". I want the singer to "know" she's gonna fly one day---in vibrant beautiful colors! There I go again! Gettin' carried away and it's not even my song!

Hope any of this is helpful. If not, discard in the nearest receptacle. [Linked Image]

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[This message has been edited by royaldghtr (edited 10-01-2006).]