Hi Barry,

I can move it for you. (Assuming you wanted it in A.I.?). I will check back if/when you confirm that for me. It has a nice production, and if it IS A.I. I like that it is scaled back rather than a huge sound. I agree with Bill that this reads like a Bluegrass screed. That is the fun of A.I. in that you can hear it is any style to see what works best.

There is nothing wrong with the lyric, though I wonder if you could develop it to tell an actual story or impart how Carolina has positively (or negatively) impacted the narrator. There's a lot of creative approaches to praising and giving accolades to a place. But including an element of narrative (say, like using Carolina's virtues to tell the story of your life, your love, your family, your history, your struggles or faults and so on. You could tell a ghost story or find an interesting historical event, or just make one up and then write an interesting story with a point or a conclusion or moral to the story or how a place can change you from this person to that.

In fact, I was thinking, as a fun exercise, that those using A.I. could have a writing challenge thing where each writes and tells a story based on that weeks Challenge and using A.I. to present it in various styles etc. All just for fun of course.

Let me know if that sounds interesting.

Brian

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