My comment to you was this
It's also not very believable in that the rhymes like .
In the nude acting lewd....

So don’t be begging my pardon
in our garden of love,

Not understanding the family tree bit

Basically it's a guy loses love, sees her with another guy, and predicts what will happen to him.
Common theme, you tried to make it different.
But rhyming just to rhyme is not a good rule.

Say what you have to say, rhyme later..

Good to see you posting here, you should respond to other songs here, not just your own


If that is mean, uncalled for, vicious, unproductive then you are a giant snow flake .

I think bens came from fact that you just ignore other songs and post this,as if nobody else deserves to be listened to.

Last edited by Fdemetrio; 11/10/24 01:21 PM.