@Deej56. Thanks Deej! I'm happy with that harmony too.

@Janice & Bud. I think I see what you mean with the instrumental build. I don't think it will ever get to production quality but I might see what I can do with it myself.

I've been trying out Ricki's suggestion, and I think starting with "I've been hanging here much too long" works pretty well. It means the last verse isn't a repeat. The first verses tell you why he is moving on and the last verse sees him doing it, so I think I'll run with that.