Originally Posted by Ricki E. Bellos
Hello JPFrs all over the world. I would like to share this guitar/vocal I recently had demoed. Can you identify the singer? smile

I don't need a critique as such, although all opinions are valuable. Mainly I'm looking for gut reactions to it, lyrically and musically.

Also, if you were to add more production, what would it be? Thanks,

Ricki

https://soundcloud.com/rickib/dangerous-girl

DANGEROUS GIRL

When there’s no fight left
And I let life beat me
You lick my wounds yourself
Won’t let it defeat me

With just a few words
And your steady gaze
I feel this living curse
Slowly slip away

You’re a dangerous girl
Fill my head with visions of the world
And who I could be
But baby look at me
I’m just a simple man in love
With a dangerous girl

It’s not just about me
I’ve learned to help you too
I know what makes you bleed
I heal by healing you

When the night descends
I’ll protect you from harm
And my brokenness mends
In the comfort of your arms

REPEAT CHORUS

Because of you I think I can
Once again be a dreaming man

REPEAT CHORUS

©Ricki E. Bellos (BMI)



Cool song, Ricki.
It's about vampires, right?
I kinda like that singer. Maybe I'll use him on my next record. Could you hook us up?