Originally Posted by Lisa Gundling
Hi Bill,

I've posted Version 4 above! I think I've used all of your suggestions, including the "gift" of rock-n-roll. After I changed this to the second person, that sounded more natural anyway, given the fact that she's singing directly to him!

Thanks so much for all your help!

Lisa


That's why we're all here, to try to help each other. Glad I could make a contribution to an already wonderful lyric. Good luck with it.