I have one big nit Lisa.....that I didn't get to this SOONER!
You've got some really good stuff...but this one I think is one of your best....or at least it's turning out to be with some excellent help and suggestions.
Too many great lines and twists (death/baby) to pick just one.
I LOVE the build up to your chorus with a flip in rhyming scheme on the last two lines to give the chorus more POP.

You slipped in the death and baby so subtly that it seemed to all fall into place with near perfect timing and story-telling.

IF I were to squawk about anything, it would be to say that your story surrounding your chorus' is TOO good! (WTF!)
If that's the case then the music has got to be spot on, to at least maintain the drama you've already drummed up in your killer story/verses.

In your song, (IMO) your chorus has got to rise ABOVE the verses to put one huge friggin exclamation point on this well told story.
Again, I see nothing wrong with your chorus but in the midst of such a beautiful story, it was a little soft, comparatively.

If you can match this story up with music that captures the mood, story, changes........wow...I mean, WOW!
Work that hook !!

This is my fav lyric post over the last couple of months.
You should consider a submission.
Great Job, Lisa.

Write on, Man,
Michael W. Brown, f.k.a. "bluesriff"

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