Hi Greg,

This is one of the target audiences I write for myself...
Sonically everything is in place and like Ian noted it Sounds Top Notch.

I agree 100% with that.
The issue for me is that I feel that it sounds like a mix of two Top Songs that I've heard this year on the Radio.

I am not familiar enough with the two groups/artists to know them by name or even the Song titles but this is where I think you will run into resistance with it...

A lot of us have trouble figuring out what the Market is looking for and we tend to write what is on Radio 'Now' but you see the problem with that is by the time it even gets to Radio the 'Audience' if you will has already moved on to another Song and Style and your Song will be viewed as 'Behind' the times if that makes sense...

It's very clear to me that you and your Co-writer know what you are doing and know how to shape a Song to Sound like a possible Hit, I think you guys did a fantastic Job:)

However, if you are able to take those skills and instincts and write something that 'Fits' the Format but is also a bit different than what is already out there, then you will boost the chance of having a solid shot at a Cut...
These are just my thoughts, I hope they help a bit.
All the best to you guys:)-Dana