Hey, Greg. I don't listen to dance music so I can't advise you at all about that. But it does seem to have a good beat. I only lyrics and without them printed I'll give you the best interpretation of what I could make out. Your hook is about breaking someone, but most of you verse lyric seemed to be about war and shooting. I don't see them as being related. I see breaking someone as mental or physical torture, one on one. That said, your audience probably couldn't give a crap, so if it works for you, go for it.:)