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well, thank you ! thank you ! and thank you ! I appreciate the comments and suggestions yall : )

Ian ...I could hear it going to another chord on THIS now that you mention it..Ill see what happens at the pitch nights and see if they are thinking that ...thanks alot yall

Heather,
That is so pro. Lyric is so conversational but killer, and the melody is just lovely.

I do agree with Monker that a third movement (bridge) would be the ingredient that will make you some money.

You elevate this board,
Tom

Astonishing. I have heard many songs on many forums over the past couple of years (since I wrote my first song). I have yet to hear anything that captures a mood/moment/situation like you did with me - with that song.

I have added you to "my favorite artist" on SC. Quality work.

wow..thanks so much yall..those are such nice comments ! I guess I will see what happens as far as changes ..I'm never above it ! we will see what happens with publishers and things such as that then I may take another walk thru this bar they are in and see if anything new is happening : ) maybe her new man walks in with the picture and says who is this ..OMG and who is that in the corner over there..uhhh : )

I enjoyed my listen too, Heather. Great song! I think a bridge would be a nice compliment to it. I vote for the bridge!

Best wishes.

Hi Heather!

This is just wonderful. Beautiful vocal (as always) against a fabulous arrangement. The lyric is equally good.

Regarding a bridge...this is one of the very few times where I would say it's optional. Normally a bridge is needed or it isn't. If it's not needed and you use one, it clutters the song. If it needs one and it's not there, it leaves the song lacking. however, in this case, I can hear it both ways. As i said, I usually have a definitive opinion about putting in a bridge. If you can add a new element in a couple of quick lines that adds to the story in a way not already said, I think a bridge would be a good idea. Otherwise, I wouldn't do it. That's my opinion.

Also, I can't believe someone rated this as only two stars in Soundclick! I gave a full five because I think it deserves it. Good luck with this one.

Alan

thanks Alan ...I'm all about a bridge most of the time ...not sure on this one ..I am going to see what happens and try and write one in..I may take the chorus melody and spiff it up a bit more too with an extra chord change or two ...thanks so much yall for the help ! Heather

Just listened again and feel a bridge would definintely enhance an already great song!! So here's my vote!

Heather,

This is, in a word, S U P E R B - I wouldn't change a thing.
First class in every respect.

All the best,
Robert

thanks so much Robert and Lynn...hmm..well im gonna keep on thinking on this : )