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ONE NEED
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COPYRIGHT 2002 KEN RANDALL
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NO NEED FOR A TORCH;HE WILL LIGHT THE WAY
NO NEED FOR A DREAM;HE'S OUR REALITY
WALK IN HIS STEPS,SOAR WITH THE BIRDS
QUENCH THE THIRST OF YOUR SOUL
IN HIS EVERLASTING WORDS.

PAINT A SMILE,WHERE YOU SEE A FROWN
REMEMBER THE SACRIFICE
THRU HIS SHROUDED GOWN
NO NEED TO HIDE IN FEAR,FOR HIS WARMTH
DRAWS NEAR
NO REASON FOR LIES,HIS TRUTH IS FOR
ALL TO HEAR

TALK WITH THE ANIMALS
IF THEY PURR HIS NAME
WALK AWAY FROM SNAKES
WHOM SLITHER IN SHAME

NO NEED FOR A CUP;HE'S A FULL GLASS
NO NEED FOR A MORSEL; THE LORD
IS OUR FULL REPAST
SHAKE HANDS WITH THE ENEMY
WHOM BARES THEIR TEETH
SHOW THEM THE STRENGTH ONTO YOU
HE HAS BEQUETHED

FOLLOW A CLOUD UNTIL IT FLOATS AWAY
REMEMBER THE BEAUTY OF EACH GLORIOUS DAY

NO NEED FOR A BLANKET;WHEN HE'S
YOUR INNER FIRE
NO NEED FOR LONGING; HE WILL SURFICE
THE DEEPEST DESIRE.

SO LETS ALL PUMP HIM UP, PUMP HIM UP
THIS JESUS!!!
PUMP IT UP;PUMP IT UP FOR JESUS
LIVE HIM UP;LIVE HIM UP OUR JESUS!!!
LIVE IT UP; LIVE IT UP IN JESUS
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LYRICS COPYRIGHT 2002 KEN RANDALL
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Hi Ken,

This is really together!
It was flowing along beautifully for me up until the snakes. I dearly love my garden snakes for eating all the slugs that eat my new veggie plants. Snakes got a bad rap because of Eve but consider this Ken:

"Be as WISE as serpents (that's not sneaky or clever, but wise)
and as gentle as doves."

Don't condemn the beautiful snakes, God already punished them and it isn't our place to continue the punishment.
Their shame is their humility.

I love how they come out and lie with one head gently atop the other and watch me do my weeding.

About your lyric:
If you post in small letters like most do, then people can put suggested changes in caps. I'll put my suggestions in small letters.


NO NEED TO HIDE IN FEAR,FOR HIS WARMTH
*is* NEAR
NO REASON to fall prey to lies
HIS TRUTH lives
for ALL TO HEAR

TALK WITH THE ANIMALS
IF THEY PURR HIS NAME
Love even the wise SNAKES
Who know the punishment of SHAME

God bless,
Terry (from Forum 3)

Hi Ken..and nice to see you...Your name sounds familiar.. If we've met and I've for
gotten...please excuse.

A very nice lyric!!!...Enjoyed reading this... A couple things...stood out to me.

I like how you held your theme together...well....!!...

I wondered about the 2nd verse...I thought it would be nice if you would start it out...much like you did the others...with the NO Need beginning..instead of putting the no need line in the middle of that verse?...Or is that 2nd stanza not a verse?..(excuse me if I'm confused)

I was also a bit...Startled.. ...after the more sophisticated wording of...
bequeathed...glorious..and repast....to have the Pump it up ending....(but that might just be me...) you almost had me jumping out of my seat there.. ...the music might explain it all....

In any case...I enjoyed reading this...

best to you......
keep writing!!!

Kaley
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[This message has been edited by Kaley Willow (edited 04-17-2006).]

Very solid write--We could all add a little more 'praise' to our prayers--Roughest verse to me was the 'No need for a cup' one--Just a take,TRYING to keep the syllable count--As always--Keep or Sweep!

No need for thirst,He'll fill your glass
No need for hunger, the Lord
is our full repast
Do not fear an enemy
or threats that have no teeth
God has already fought the battle
The Victory is complete

Well, maybe something usable, any way--Al

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Keep dreamin', keep writing

I liked a lot of the lyrics. I must admit I was even more impressed with the in defense of snakes comments by Terry. Wow.


Only a couple of nits...
SHAKE HANDS WITH THE ENEMY
WHOM BARES THEIR TEETH

should probably be
SHAKE HANDS WITH THE ENEMIES
WHO BARE THEIR TEETH

keeps from mixing singular and plural.

Also WHO is the person doing something
WHOM is the target of that action.

most of your WHOM's should be WHO, but since few know or care about the grammer rule, you might keep the WHOM's if you think they sound better.

Hi Ken,

Good, strong, praise song that conveys the message well. The majority of things in this lyric work, so I will only comment on what jumped out at me when I first read yours.

First is structure. I couldn’t figure out which part was a chorus. Usually a chorus repeats, so even if it’s not marked, I can tell. Labeling verse 1, chorus, etc. will help. Next was your title. “One Need”, which I could not find anywhere in your song. The chorus would be a great place to hit home your message “One Need”. I also agree with Kaley on the “Pump it up” part. The term is a little old and I think detracts from the very nice words in the rest of the song.

Hope I didn’t come across negative cause that ain’t me. Just adding my 2 cents.

Good luck.

Iggy
www.badbetsy.com

Thanks Moosesong!

Humble and generous of you to say!

Terry

Hi Ken,
Your thoughts are good but I'm like iggy, can't really tell what the various sections are with the varying number of lines, or how the verses can be sung to the same melody.
Yeah, some labeling would help. You've got good content and that's the most important thing
Wy

Hi Ken, I like this song. I didn't care for the ending though about "pump him up". I was "grooving" with everything until I hit that and it was kind of like hitting a speed bump for me.

"follow a cloud until it floats away" is too pretty of a line to have it ended with "pump him up"

Thank you to everyone for the great words of encouragement and advice, when i wrote these lyrics i envisioned it to be an upbeat style
dance song for the christian club sect,
when i was a younger man pump up the volume was a happening song in the dance clubs see ya later, ken

Looking for collaboration with vocals and music creation, lyrical changes are ok

I guess I'm the odd man out on this one, but the language seems so mixed on this. We have "pump Him up" mixed with "bequeath" and "repast", light sayings like "paint a smile where you see a frown" next to lines about his death shroud. Am I the only one that finds this mixture odd?

I'd work for consistency in language and tone in this. If you're going for dance club style, I'd get rid of the King James-like olde English constructions. I'd also suggest pulling everything together under one theme and throw out anything that doesn't have to do with it. There are a quite a few lines that just sound like a collection of stock Christian imagery jumbled together, particularly the first verse.

I'm not sure what the title has to do with the lyric. As Iggy said, it would be good to fit it into the chorus somehow and tie the lines into it. [edit] OOPS! I get it now... the "No need" is leading to the "one need". I guess I was missing the tie-in there. (Slow on the uptake today).

I hope I'm not coming off too harsh. I think we should work on songs for Jesus at least as hard as any song to be played on the radio.

Looking forward to the next re-write to see where you take this.

- James

Thanks for the advice, well taken, hope to have a revision soon,Take care James , thanks for stopping by to listen Ken