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This is a song about Florida - the place I was born and now call home again. There’s just something about the sunshine, the beaches, and the lifestyle here that feels like paradise. I had to write a song about it. Hope you like it.

Florida
https://soundclick.com/song/15250028

[Intro]
Whoa Whoa-oh-ah
Whoa Whoa-oh-ah

[Verse]
Sunburnt sky, salt in the air
Palm trees swayin’ everywhere
All night long on a waterfront dock
Flip-flops, tan lines, country rock

[Pre-chorus]
Thunder rollin’ every afternoon
Rain comes fast, then it’s gone too soon

[Chorus]
Florida!
Sunshine state of mind
Florida!
Where the sun always shines
I love to live wild and free
That’s where I wanna be
Florida
Whoa, Florida

[Verse]
Jet skis cuttin’ through the waves
Beach town buzz in the summer haze
Line dancin’ in outdoor bars
Beach blonde girls and pickup cars

[Pre-chorus]
Manatees driftin’ slow downstream
Livin’ that easy sunshine dream

[Chorus]
Florida!
Sunshine state of mind
Florida!
Where the sun always shines
I love to live wild and free
That’s where I wanna be
Florida
Whoa, Florida

[Bridge]
Hot nights, warm winds blow
Swamp water risin’, gators on the go
Beaches, boats, the tide rolls on
Florida nights they go on and on and on

[Interlude]

[Final chorus]
Florida!
Sunshine state of mind
Florida!
Where the sun always shines
I love to live wild and free
That’s where I wanna be
Florida
Whoa, Florida

[Outro]
Whoa Whoa-oh-ah
Florida!
Whoa Whoa-oh-ah
Florida!

Theres nothing that distinguishes this from any other beach city or state.

Coud be jersey shoree or California, or Hawaii, or Venice,

Cliché images, needs alot of work

I think that the song is pretty good.

Florida is the title and is sung several times throughout the song, so to my ears the location is clearly established.

The songs appears to intend to be light-hearted and frolicking, and I think that it gets there.

Personally, I might have mentioned something about sitting in a lounger on a beach with an umbrella in my drink...

And maybe some geographical reference such as, "from the Keys to the Georgia line,"
(sea to shining sea)

But those are personal notes.

Pleasant tune.

Yes pleasant.

Thanks for the feedback, Dom. Fair point - a lot of beach places share similar vibes. I’ve actually been to all the places you mentioned, and they definitely each have their own flavor.
But I think swamp water, gators, afternoon thunderstorms, palm trees, Gulf Coast life, and that Florida heat still give this song a pretty specific identity.
And when I was in Jersey in January, I definitely didn’t see beach blonde girls in flip-flops with tan lines under swaying palm trees 😄
Appreciate you listening and taking the time to comment.

Thanks Marty, I really appreciate that.

You understood exactly what I was going for - something fun, light-hearted, catchy, and full of Florida vibes.
I actually like your idea about adding a few more uniquely Florida references like “from the Keys to the Georgia line” or the beach lounger imagery. Those kinds of details could definitely help paint the picture even more. In almost every song there is room for improvement.

Thanks again for listening and for the thoughtful feedback!

or manatees.

On top of lack of clarity, its a big so what laundry list of things.

New York that's whete I wanna be
Tourists racing,
Thugs defaming
Sky scrapers and Broadway
Statue of liberty
And MSG
Rats the size of dogs
New York is whete I wanna be.

Two seconds....

No connection to anybody, no emotion, get to work

Thanks Dom. I get what you’re saying.

Right now the song is intentionally more of a fun, feel-good Florida anthem than a deep personal story, but I do think you make a fair point about adding more emotional connection and less “laundry list.”

That’s part of the songwriting process - refining what works and what doesn’t. I appreciate the honest feedback.

When I listen to the song, I hear a little "Margaritaville," but mostly I hear something that might be used in ads by a Chamber of Commerce.

If I were charged by a FLA COC for getting a tune for an ad, I would want a song that had a happy uplifting tempo and music...and quickly moved through an array of appealing mental images.

I would not want it to be overly concentrated with FLA images, because the main target would see "beach-goers" at large. Generic lines about tan lines and so forth that could be applied to any beach, would be desirable.

I think that this song gets all of that done reasonably well.
The content could be written thousands of ways, but this gets it done.

The purpose of some songs is to be light and pleasant.

And where's the reference to Cubans?

70% of the state is Cuban population.

Thanks Marty, I appreciate the additional thoughts. The best part is - I actually live here, so this really is my everyday life 😄

Dom, that's fake news. Cubans make up roughly 7% of Florida’s population. I see no reason to mention them. I live here. To me this place is like paradise. I'm happy, content, I feel good and I just wanted to write a fun tribute to where I was born and where I now live.

You got a very Anglo centric, racist, if you will view of Flirida.

Florida hosts the largest concentration of Cuban Americans in the U.S., with an estimated 1.6 to 1.8 million residents as of late 2025/2026, representing about 61–64% of the total U.S. Cuban population. The majority are concentrated in South Florida, with over 1.2 million in the Miami-Dade County area alone.Key Demographic Data (2025-2026):Total in Florida: Approx. 1.56–1.8 million.Concentration: Over 60% of all U.S. Cubans live in Florida.Miami-Dade Impact: The Miami metro area has the highest concentration, with over 1.2 million individuals.Other Key Areas: Tampa (approx. 200,000) and Jacksonville (approx. 7,000) also hold significant populations.Top Cities (by population): Hialeah (167,577), Miami (142,155), and unincorporated areas like Westchester and Tamiami.Key Findings:Density: Cuban Americans constitute a majority in some Florida municipalities, such as West Miami (53.8%) and Hialeah (over 94% of the population).Demographic Shift: Recent data indicates nearly 7.14% of Florida’s total population is of Cuban origin.Migration Trends: Immigration tends to fluctuate based on economic and political conditions in Cuba.

First off,
AI (Gemini) says that FLA cuban-decent population is between 6.5 and 7.1 percent.

If you were doing a documentary on FLA life, I think that the Cubans should be included.

I also think that you might rename the song,

"Old Farts in Golf Carts,"

because there is lots of that down there.

But, for a light-hearted song that just wants to create a feeling of enjoyment for a destination, home, place....with a focus on beach and shore...

I, personally would not include them.

I would, its reality.


Its more a brochure than a song.

First off, uplifting, party vibe, summer song.

Perhaps "too busy" in the imagery.....maybe a little for everybody? Someone is watching from the sidelines enjoying the shade???

Florida, where the sun always shines it's rays down on me??? live wild and free adds to the mayhem

All I have here

BTW emailed you....

Yup. Its features over feeling.

Tuff to make a fresh beach song . They're usually all the same , beaches , sand , a band playing , and of course the sun . Usually they throw in bikinis, and of course tan lines.

But sounds good Rob.

Chesney is worth 500 million singing beach songs

Dom, 7% is exactly what I said. You first claimed it was 70%. That number was incorrect.
So you would include the Cubans in the song. What about the Mexicans, Columbians, Haitians, etc. ... and the 15% Afro-Americans. Do you really think I should add them to the song? Why don't you give it a try yourself?

Hey John,
thanks for the feedback and the ideas. I just sent you something.

Hi Ben, yes, it is tough to write a fresh beach song with something different. Beaches are basically the same everywhere: sun, sand, music, tan lines, bikini babes. That's reality. I didn't want to write a philosophic song, so it is what it is. I'm glad you guys (with the exception of Dom) all like it.

This somg is making me wanna go to Hawaii

Dom, I’m cracking up 😄
The song says “Florida” about 18 times and somehow it’s making you want to go to Hawaii. I guess at least it’s having some kind of tropical effect on you lol.

Perfect imagery of Florida, Rob. I owned a few places in Florida over the years and the visuals you create here are exactly what I remember, I used to go down to the beach in the morning at Fort Myers beach and watch the dolphins chase fish right up to the shore line ....really nice production

Steve

Hey Steve,
I live in Cape Coral. Fort Myers is right next door. That's probably my description comes so close to your memories. Thanks for the feedback.

Ah yes Cape Coral... back in the 80's when I got a spot in FMB I also started buying up residential building lots in CC so I have a bit of a connection to the area...sold everything in 2000 and haven't returned since but loved going down there, particularly the west coast which is so much calmer than the east coast

You are here everyday reading, not fooling anybody, and you zoom in on Rob, you must kiss his ass.

Be a real member, this is a bad song.perfect imagery, what a liar

Thats a personal attack , You broke the rules. We will take your push a buttons toy away from you for one month. You will have to go to the studio now . You are banned from Suno .

We also sentence you to move in with Tony. You also have to write a beach song ASAP. No sand , beaches or bikinis . You will be fined $3000.00 if you sing tan lines . She spent 6 months at a Tan Salon getting skin cancer . You're going to die , you're an albino . Be proud white and Irish . Now get out there and kick some sand in some muscle guy face, holding a Tiki Drink in one hand .

Thats a fresh hook , Albinos And Tiki Drinks. Co write it with Jim Gafigan. They stare out the window, from Shady Hotel at the beach , cuz they're to white. Get it done , get hate mail from Albinos , Like Tim
Mcgraw got from Indians. Were deeply offended , Ok will give you casinos steal from white devils . Well ok. Thats not a bad deal Chief kick in that pants . You just offened us again . Sorry about that .

Well get famous, have to sing the Albino song every night . Man I'm bored, here's a song about a female Truck . Well can't be any worse than the Albino song , One drunk fan hollered .

He likes Rob, but because he is a liberal, Trump hating , democratic Canadian.

Which is fine, I dont care aboit your views, but stop pretending its something else

it's always Rob he has to comment on.

Hes here anyway, stop pretending, and join the songwriting talk.

Rob posts a song, Marty has to join im, John, this old guy, you. Japov

If the site is gonna be about Rob, well make it about Rob how bad this slop is.

Theres other people trying to heard and they get buried with this non sense.

Since they can do what they want, so can i

Blah Blah Blah , No personal attacks