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This is a song about Florida - the place I was born and now call home again. There’s just something about the sunshine, the beaches, and the lifestyle here that feels like paradise. I had to write a song about it. Hope you like it.

Florida
https://soundclick.com/song/15250028

[Intro]
Whoa Whoa-oh-ah
Whoa Whoa-oh-ah

[Verse]
Sunburnt sky, salt in the air
Palm trees swayin’ everywhere
All night long on a waterfront dock
Flip-flops, tan lines, country rock

[Pre-chorus]
Thunder rollin’ every afternoon
Rain comes fast, then it’s gone too soon

[Chorus]
Florida!
Sunshine state of mind
Florida!
Where the sun always shines
I love to live wild and free
That’s where I wanna be
Florida
Whoa, Florida

[Verse]
Jet skis cuttin’ through the waves
Beach town buzz in the summer haze
Line dancin’ in outdoor bars
Beach blonde girls and pickup cars

[Pre-chorus]
Manatees driftin’ slow downstream
Livin’ that easy sunshine dream

[Chorus]
Florida!
Sunshine state of mind
Florida!
Where the sun always shines
I love to live wild and free
That’s where I wanna be
Florida
Whoa, Florida

[Bridge]
Hot nights, warm winds blow
Swamp water risin’, gators on the go
Beaches, boats, the tide rolls on
Florida nights they go on and on and on

[Interlude]

[Final chorus]
Florida!
Sunshine state of mind
Florida!
Where the sun always shines
I love to live wild and free
That’s where I wanna be
Florida
Whoa, Florida

[Outro]
Whoa Whoa-oh-ah
Florida!
Whoa Whoa-oh-ah
Florida!

Theres nothing that distinguishes this from any other beach city or state.

Coud be jersey shoree or California, or Hawaii, or Venice,

Cliché images, needs alot of work

I think that the song is pretty good.

Florida is the title and is sung several times throughout the song, so to my ears the location is clearly established.

The songs appears to intend to be light-hearted and frolicking, and I think that it gets there.

Personally, I might have mentioned something about sitting in a lounger on a beach with an umbrella in my drink...

And maybe some geographical reference such as, "from the Keys to the Georgia line,"
(sea to shining sea)

But those are personal notes.

Pleasant tune.

Yes pleasant.

Thanks for the feedback, Dom. Fair point - a lot of beach places share similar vibes. I’ve actually been to all the places you mentioned, and they definitely each have their own flavor.
But I think swamp water, gators, afternoon thunderstorms, palm trees, Gulf Coast life, and that Florida heat still give this song a pretty specific identity.
And when I was in Jersey in January, I definitely didn’t see beach blonde girls in flip-flops with tan lines under swaying palm trees 😄
Appreciate you listening and taking the time to comment.

Thanks Marty, I really appreciate that.

You understood exactly what I was going for - something fun, light-hearted, catchy, and full of Florida vibes.
I actually like your idea about adding a few more uniquely Florida references like “from the Keys to the Georgia line” or the beach lounger imagery. Those kinds of details could definitely help paint the picture even more. In almost every song there is room for improvement.

Thanks again for listening and for the thoughtful feedback!

or manatees.

On top of lack of clarity, its a big so what laundry list of things.

New York that's whete I wanna be
Tourists racing,
Thugs defaming
Sky scrapers and Broadway
Statue of liberty
And MSG
Rats the size of dogs
New York is whete I wanna be.

Two seconds....

No connection to anybody, no emotion, get to work

Thanks Dom. I get what you’re saying.

Right now the song is intentionally more of a fun, feel-good Florida anthem than a deep personal story, but I do think you make a fair point about adding more emotional connection and less “laundry list.”

That’s part of the songwriting process - refining what works and what doesn’t. I appreciate the honest feedback.