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Found this forgot about it. The hook is a hit, no doubt,

The female vocal offered the best take.

I got to do 125 songs or so with this thingy.

Won't hurt either way, but I kinda like it.

https://www.udio.com/songs/39QZV23tL6EjzSczsCE95v

Far too long an intro FD....36 seconds ...especially for a poppy number like this..then more of the same between sections.
Worse, no memorable hook into the song
IMO people want to hear what this is about

really like that refrain btw...and the kiss her... is top notch

Can you do Springsteen? His Streets of Minneapolis is incredibly simple to play and sing...he does not need intricate here.

The tension of she fell down, as harmonies soar, and id pick her up and kiss her...etc.

Is massive hook musically, maybe not lyrically, but its close to how I wrote it..

So I totally disagree no memorable hook, though its right in yiur face, but I think you mean lyrics, ..so be it.

I camt pull one out of a hat every song, sometimes a big lyrical hook is not always needed

But appreciate the listen amd comments

Yeah I could do Springsteen, he's the reason I write. Pete Townshehd is the reason I play..and write.

But much as I love Bruce im not sure he's right on that song, and it's not a great song anyway.

But he does what he believes in, he just did it alot better in his younger years

I agree that refrain is a great hook, but there is no musical hook in the intro....should have made that more clear...

Well as ive mentioned before yiu are limited . At least doing it this way, i sit for hours till I find what I wanna hear. And when I do, it often comes with baggage yiu dont necessarily wznt.

That will change when I switch to suno. The goal is to have Ai back me up and support me, not do it for me.

I wanna first start with a capella stuff just to see if the way im harmonizing my tunes is similar.

But I plan on having more fun with it, its kinda boring now.but yiud understand better you were doing this too..

Can't be more simple than saying cut it to 15 sec intro, you cant.... if you do you might miss the best parts too

Dom,
I noticed the song title in Udio is “Gala in Blue,” but I think something like “She Fell Down” might be more memorable and hook-driven.
Also, I couldn’t find the lyrics posted anywhere, and the ones in Udio don’t seem to match what the vocalist is actually singing. It would really help to have the correct lyrics available.
I like the tune overall and the vocalist’s voice a lot, but the intro and interlude feel a bit too long—they lose some momentum. The ending also feels a little abrupt; a bit more repetition there might help the song stick better.
I tend to agree with John as well—the hook line doesn’t quite land yet.

Hiw could you agree with John about how the hook should land, when he later clarified he was referring to there bring no musical hook. And THAT was the thin Which there several but

Tell you what, make a little recording of yiu singing it, so I can see how the hook should land.

I gave you my 10 cents. I said I liked the tune and the vocalist's voice. The hook issue has nothing to do with the way it was sung. Anyway, have a nice day.