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V1
That dog was howling and the whole house could hear
and it really sounded like the end of the world was near

A cardboard box, a blanket and the ticking of a clock
finally put that pup to sleep but I never forgot
the way

CHORUS
A NOTHER... HEART... BEAT
SAVED HIM FROM THE DARK
IT'S A BA SIC IN STINCT
THAT'S SETS US ALL APART
THE rhythm OF A NOTHER LIFE
THAT SAYS WE'RE NOT ALONE

It's something we all want & we all need
another heart beat

V2
The baby was crying and the whole house could hear
I never heard such misery from such a little girl

but when her Daddy picked her up
and held her to his chest
she stopped and I was shocked
the way I was back then
when

CHORUS
A NOTHER... HEART... BEAT
SAVED HER FROM THE DARK
IT'S A BA SIC IN STINCT
THAT'S SETS US ALL APART
THE rhythm OF A NOTHER LIFE
THAT SAYS WE'RE NOT ALONE

It's something we all want & we all need
another heart beat

The baby was six years old and the dog was by her side
When she got lost in the snow with nowhere to hide
She was scared and cold and lost
but he was not
dragged her by her coat , led her home
cus he never forgot
the way

CHORUS
A NOTHER... HEART... BEAT
SAVED HER FROM THE DARK
IT'S A BA SIC IN STINCT
THAT'S SETS US ALL APART
THE rhythm OF A NOTHER LIFE
THAT SAYS WE'RE NOT ALONE

It's something we all want & we all need
another heart beat

Wow I got such a good response around the internet about this song.. and nothing here?

The "dog" angle got to me. I had to fight off tears. I hate lyrics that clogs up my sinuses - ha, ha. The music is appealing and does it justice. I imagine the production is 100% Suno. The simplicity of the chord progression makes it almost impossible not to sound like it was already done somewhere back in time. But I don't know. Anyway, I never listen to Suno productions. This was my first time. And I hate myself for doing it. Why? Because it struck an emotional nerve. I really liked it. The lead guitar part, though nice, took me away from my emotions that the lyrics & melody provided. Maybe better without it. A couple riffs in between the lyrical melody may be better.

Best, John

Hmmmmn...

I agree with John, kill the generic guitar solo.

And if you really want to make the kids cry...

Grab an Fm after the third verse for a bridge;

Another dose of Nitrostat, another EKG
No more tequila shots or "life of the party"
Her fat old ass can no longer dance
She traded her "Twerk" for a heartbeat
And that old dog got hit by a truck
...In 1973

Then one more round of that beautiful chorus!