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I heard this somewhere on a news broadcast last night and literally flew to the kitchen for a piece of paper.

I don't write political stuff........... but someone would do something really fun with this! Or maybe not political at all, it just sounded like a song to me.. haha

A Lyrical Structure opening with the Chorus.
Making rhythm and rhyme work is easy enough.
Setting it to music is more difficult. And the finished product could only be evaluated as to merit when finished.
Its value at this point seems limited to novelty, which can be commercially viable, but...
Someone told Willie Nelson, "Be careful what kind of Songs you write. You'll have to sing them the rest of your life!"

"If Hot Tubs Could Talk"

(Chorus)
If Hot Tubs Could Talk,
you and I'd be in trouble!
There's more to last night,
than the champagne and bubbles!
Money could talk, and BS could walk,
If Hot Tubs Could Talk.

(Verse I)
We took our evening,
up to the next level!
If anyone saw us,
they saw us disheveled!
Your hair was tousled!
My shirt inside out!
They'd point and giggle,
and gossip no doubt!

If Hot Tubs Could Talk,
you and I'd be in trouble!
There's more to last night,
than the champagne and bubbles!
Money could talk, and BS could walk,
If Hot Tubs Could Talk.

(Verse II)
We took our chances,
with the tub at the hotel!
We were not cautious,
to keep passion quelled!
We should have known,
there'd be Paparazzi!
Now they're showing pictures,
of us on the TV!

If Hot Tubs Could Talk,
you and I'd be in trouble!
There's more to last night,
than the champagne and bubbles!
Money could talk, and BS could walk,
If Hot Tubs Could Talk.

(Coda)
And baby, I wouldn't change a thing!

hahah I think that's really cute!!!


Here ya go Gary... .....
https://suno.com/s/uH4LPUd4mQJyioBu

not a final version for sure, but I just love playing with Suno

Verse 3 is too wordy............... want me to play with it?

Chat GPT came up with this as a bridge...
Some nights stay quiet forever
Some float around town for years
Some stories never leave the water
Some show up in beers

I think tha'ts pretty clever.

I still can't hear it. But if you're happy I'm happy.
I can see it having appeal to 'showbiz' folks, where almost any publicity is good publicity.
Pair up a couple of people, Video with them drinking champagne and careening around Nashtown, somewhat boisterously, attracting attention, and then a scene at a hot tub. He strips off his shirt, empties his pockets, slips out of Crocs, steps into a hot tub in blue jeans. She's dressed in an elegant gown but laughs at his lead and follows, fully clothed, dives in head first, comes up on him, shares a kiss.
Paparazzi! Flash!
Then, Security on the scene, Paparazzi flashing pictures, water dripping from the two of them. Man in a suit, back to camera, waving arms around, Hotel Manager?
She's smiling. He's smiling. She reaches up and 'fixes' his hair, links arms, grins at him. He grins back. They grin for the cameras.
Scene!
LOL
We spoke of 'furniture' which is any 'visuals' you induce the listener to 'see' with your Lyric.
Now they can easily augment the Lyrical 'furniture' in Video.
You can examine a Lyric for 'furniture' by doing a Story Board. A sheet of paper, divided into four or six squares, stick figures portraying the action described or implied in the Lyric. Simple but revelatory in whether you have furniture or not. However many sheets of paper you need. A Videographer might appreciate the insight of what you want to create. I think Artificial Intelligence can do that now too, visual Deep Fake visual fabrication just like Suno does for sound.
I remember listening to a Song on CMT years ago and wondering what the Video was about because it didn't seem to have a coherent theme at all. Listening to the Song I realized the Song wasn't about anything. That's why the Video was incoherent.
You can have "If Hot Tubs Could Talk" and do anything you want with it. I relinquish all Rights that are bestowed upon me as the writer to you, with this post being the legal guarantee I will abide by. Print it out, file it, date it. If you get rich with it, and you might, you'll think fondly of me while sailing on your yacht.

Oh! The Bridge.
I wondered if it would need a Bridge. Starting with the Chorus, which 'hits' THE Hook, the Title Line, twice in each giving, given three times, six 'hits', is pretty strong all by itself.
A Bridge to break the Repetition may not be necessary. If we're approaching the 3:30 mark on time a Bridge, especially a long Stanza of multiple Lines, might drive it over the Radio-Friendly desired time. They like them short, leaving more time to play commercial advertising that pays the bills.
Judgment calls to make.
And I think radio is still the best 'broad casting' to potential 'buyers' of downloads, hard copy CD's, and tickets.

well yeah, not sure if it needs a bridge................true.

ha ha ha , if hot tubs could talk. I don't know ,I guess the files Epstein all that, play that in the White House. thats a killer hook.

Playful modern country song with a mischievous outlaw edge. Mid-tempo groove, 4/4 time, catchy sing-along chorus. Male vocal with a warm, slightly raspy voice, confident and charming. Lyrics tell a humorous story about a steamy late-night moment in a hotel hot tub that almost became public gossip. Tone is cheeky, flirty, and lighthearted, not explicit. Strong hook built around the line “If Hot Tubs Could Talk.” Acoustic guitar driven with light electric fills, steady drums, subtle bass, and a fun, memorable chorus that feels radio-ready and perfect for live crowds. if you like that promt

Yup , unless you want it more sarcastic , that works

(Verse II) (Too wordy? Here's an edit.)
We took our chances,
in the hotel tub!
We were not cautious!
Ah! There's the rub! (Line from Shakespeare.)
We should have known,
there'd be Paparazzi!
They're showing pictures,
of us on TV!

..........MmMMM.. I thought the line was "therein lies the rub" LOL

hard stretch to rhyme paparazzi with tv......

there'd be cameras everywhere .......... (or there'd be cell phones everywhere)

By holding the keyboard up to my ear I hear this one. And like the handclap rhythm. It's a hit! LOL
https://suno.com/s/uH4LPUd4mQJyioBu

Awwwwwwwwwwww Gary, come on now... it's needs some tweaking..........but it IS fun!

Maybe if we insert a line about

I bet Bill wished it was a time machine (... lol ya know hot tub time machine)

Could be pretty funny and take off on tick tok LOL

Bill and Jeff and all the rest

Here ya go Ben............ your Suno version

https://suno.com/s/hNzTggUpQwaU4WCa

I'd like to see you add that bridge. Might not need it but I'd like to hear what it sounds like. Never the less this is good.

Tex!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I was wondering if you were still around.! Nice to see ya man. I'll play with a bridge. (or you could) <<<< wink

Some nights can stay quiet forever
Some float around the town for years
Some stories never leave the water
Some show up after 15 beers


Not sure I like this bridge, but gotta start somewhere

hey Bennash, I am a big fan of sarcasm!!!

Yeah I'm a fan of it . or comedy hour