This is very good IMHO. You have received some valid suggestions above but I am not sure that it needs much (although the crowd is on its feet!).

Your verses start out pretty mellow and build up to the chorus well. Some different chords would add interest as Zeek said but you may be too far along to consider that change.

Good job!


Colin

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