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Lot Long
by Gary E. Andrews - 11/10/26 11:20 AM
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Joined: Jul 2005
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My new favorite rhyming scheme: aac, bbc! Great instrumentation throughout. Once Moker mentioned a bridge -- I said "What bridge?" (LOL), so I had to listen again. It could be that "Last night I..." section -- but it has the same scheme so I counted it as another verse.
I think you could experiment with the vocal phrasing on some of the lines -- but you probably already have. Nonetheless, another great little tune. I wish I had your patience to craft a lyric. I think I could be pretty good if I did that. In all reality, I am more of a FAWM/RPM/5090 type guy -- love 'em and leave 'em (songs, that is).
Kevin I like that rhyme scheme too, Kevin. I never set out to get it - just sometimes the tune leads it in that direction. Yeah, the bridge is the section starting with "last night". I didn't even notice it had the same rhyme scheme! Chord progression is different - that's mostly what I was focused on. Phrasing can be improved too, I'm sure.... Patience? LOL  I can tell you how to spend more time with your lyrics but you won't like it. Move from a place where you have a 3 minute commute to one where you have a 50 minute commute. Don't car-pool and don't play the radio in the car. You're all set. Scott
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