Aladar,

Listened to the song you mentioned. You have a few things which slow it down. First off, having a 30 second intro in this day and age is a killer right off the bat. People tend to tune out at about 10-15 seconds and if you are not singing by then, you are gone.
The "Whiter Shade of Pale" organ sound gives it that 1971 rock feel which contributes to the dated feel mentioned earlier. While there are some elements of older rock in today's music especially in the country market, it is more what "rock would sound like to day with up dated sounds and feels."

You have a severe musically redundancy problem where the chord structure is the same on into the two minute part of the song. There is no "release' section that a big singable chorus would address. Something that changes the chord structure and gives a "breathable section" to the song. There is really no place for the audience to sing along, thereby giving it just the same pattern chord, phrasing and melodic structure on the vocals.

As far as the lyrics they are a line between metaphorical and reality. Get the part about the courthouse, small town etc. but don't really understand what they all have to do with each other. Again, there is not a lot that pulls you into the title. Not much to reinforce the hook.

One of the biggest questions we have to answer as writers is "WHY?"
Why is the singer singing this song?
WHy did the writer want to write it, what drove him to write it?
Why should the audience care?

There is just not enough about the song that would pull most listeners in and keep their attention.

Of course this is just an opinion.

MAB