Sam - Hey! Good to read something from you, it's been awhile since I've had the chance. I think this is good and there's a lot of excellent imagery. There are a couple tiny things that I noticed reading through it. Nothing major but I will go ahead and point them out and you can say that I'm picky and I constrain your wonderful art!

Blue eyes, blond hair and that pentacle I wear
Silver snake on a pagan star
I'm old enough to feel but nothing seems real (this line feels like it needs one more syllable...maybe "seems QUITE real" or something)
Still listenin' for a cool guitar

Love my girlfriends til the bitter bloody end (I would switch it around to "bloody bitter end)
A simple hug is everything
The time just flies, but stills in her eyes
And I love to hear her sing


I love the ending although it's kind of depressing. Good work Sam!