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IRAN
by Fdemetrio - 04/15/26 12:27 PM
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PETE
by Fdemetrio - 04/14/26 06:57 AM
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Joined: Apr 2001
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Hi Wendy,
That's a real good theme and imagery
I;m just going to look at V 3 since that's the one you questioned. Lines 2 and 3 seem to me to contradict each other.
If the disguise is taken off, he's already revealed. The last line seems to preclude any get together. If you want to give more hope of a get together --happy ending. This would be pretty much a rewrite but it's just ideas.
Would the one millionth time be a charm
Would you stay with me
Get up and walk like a man
You know my heart wants to believe
Worth some more work
Good luck with it
Wy--Mud
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