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Ali Angel
by Gary E. Andrews - 06/27/26 11:00 PM
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Riot Fest
by Gary E. Andrews - 06/21/26 10:51 PM
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ok..i got the song back form a songu coach ...heres the evaluation and I think he/she is right ..anyone want to offer up ideas for verse 2 ...if anyone comes up with anything I want to keep I will take them as cowriter..I would like to spiff this one up !
Love your title and the way you wrote the chorus lyric, really good job... one problem for me with the second verse, it seems too novelty and out of context with the seriousness of the rest of your song, I would rewrite the second verse to fit the rest of your song... Good melody, very easy to listen too...
Should be a good song for you....Very unique title and idea... A for originalityI think this song has potential ( with a rewrite clearing up some of the phrases that do not fit the song...etc.
( like Sharpest tool in the shed, I ain't sayin he's ugly,
these lines are good but belong in another song with a big sense of humor
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