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nice melody Heather, i hear pedal steel sending this one where it needs to go...i like the old flame ain't so hot and the SOL line...your vocal is very honest in this one, helps to make it believable, you know that's a key element to how a song is received...if i were to give any advice it would only to be a little more clever withmaybe a handful of lines in the lyric...what you have says it well, i'd try and embellish it a little so the lines have a snap to them like the lines i mention, they're unique, say what you mean, and are very clever, some of the others are just there Heather, i know you know what i mean, they can't all be clever, but a few more of them would give this song some more steam...i still say you have a very beautiful vocal delivery...good write...moker