You're onto a great one, Moker. I've been trying to write country too. About this point, after the first pass is done, is when I end up seeing one of couchgrouches lyrics, and I despair. grin But after that, I find myself combing through the lyric and looking for opportunities to insert more solid images, paint more pictures, see if there are any ways to double the meaning of the hook...

Have you thought about either a tag or a last verse (maybe the last chorus) where it's much later, and this time that tiny voice is their child?