Hi Derek,

I've read several of yours and it seems to me that you are a better songwriter than I am so there's not much I can help you with.

Now, as a consumer, I can tell you that this song wouldn't entice me just because it's about getting drunk. But, I can imagine that those who drink for sport might get a kick out of this one. I got the humor right away and you've supported the hook as well as it could be supported as far as I can tell. It is a stretch imo. But, it's still funny.

You might consider rewording this part to be more conversational imo.

Well I GUESS I COULD HEAR THE MUSIC on the radio
I didn’t have to pay top dollar not to see this show
But to hear George singing live “fool hearted memory”
It warms a special place deep inside of me

I'll try to get by and critique another one later. Gotta go cook breakfast now. Welcome to JPF. I like to see prolific writers here. smile

Vanessa