ajk, I read your lyric, obviously, and I gotta be honest... your punchline needs a better joke.

"I’m gonna keep on drinkin’ Till I can’t see Strait" is a great line, and that poses a problem because no other line even comes close to matching it. None.

Don't get me wrong... the Idea's great and your intentions are obvious and smart, but the pieces aren't coming together as easily as they should or as clever as a Strait song would. And that should be your goal.

Cheers,
Dog