Hi..Ken...Just read this...and I really thought it was well done..!!

the only thing that jumped out at me...
is the same B.G...mentioned; that "you"
in the chorus....

there's the her...than the we'd..so am not following on why back to the you.......as it switches to...her again...right after.that

I'm not always super great..on the pronouns myself...but this one...jumped out at me...
Many times...I've gone to Bobbie..and
asked her advice...as she taught University Level English....and she's straightened me out...or tried to... [Linked Image]...

Like this a lot..
best to ya...
Kaley [Linked Image]