TTerry, I assumed you didn't know what a near rhyme was because as I explained clearly in the above post, bout us/Dallas DON'T share even a close vowel sound on the accented syllable which means they aren't a near rhyme anymore than crazy and floozy are. psalm/upon are a near rhyme because they share a common vowel and similiar consonants. I felt funny explaining what I thought was obvious but i didn't know what else to say. if that means I'm "into myself", oh well. this IS a lyric critique board and in the intro to his lyric blake welcomed "nitpicking". I don't nitpick but I did point out what I thought were weaknesses in the lyric in a courteous manner. chief of which are, not the sloppy rhymes but the hook and bland vss. that's the purpose of a critique. he's certainly free to ignore my critique which won't bother me one bit. but i will be honest.

Nashville demos etc:

https://www.soundclick.com/bands3/default.cfm?bandID=431939

other demos:

https://soundcloud.com/wabash-cannibal

Amazon Kindle books by Robert George you may enjoy:

1) Americana

2) Teenage Graceland

3) The Will to Be

4) Fort Mystery

5) Wheel Sea

6) My One True Love