blake, the rhymes are a secondary concern. a weak hookline and vss that are kinda bland were what stood out to me. if you have strong ideas and iffy rhymes, no prob. but to have neither would put a burden on the composer to make the song interesting.

as for the rhymes...'bout us/Dallas isn't a near rhyme. it doesn't rhyme at all. the accented syllables have completely different vowel sounds.

as for what Nash does, I'm well aware because I browse their lyrics on the Net. Nash songs do have very low standards in many areas. the question is, do you aspire to be the best writer you can be or just settle for what requires the least talent and effort? that's for each of us to decide. but I think that for an outsider to make his mark, his work needs to stand out, not blend in with the pack. JMO... [Linked Image]

Nashville demos etc:

https://www.soundclick.com/bands3/default.cfm?bandID=431939

other demos:

https://soundcloud.com/wabash-cannibal

Amazon Kindle books by Robert George you may enjoy:

1) Americana

2) Teenage Graceland

3) The Will to Be

4) Fort Mystery

5) Wheel Sea

6) My One True Love